[Lilian N]

Song of Freedom

The world's disappointing.
I protested against capitalism, racism
It did not changed anything.
I shouted against conflict and oppression,
but they are stubborn.
Ouch, ouch, ouch,
That's why everything is fucked.
In this world where the system has made the helpless
Poor and numb,
By the laws decided by the outlaws.
In this world where morality is no longer capital,
i feel like I reach no wander.
We screamed, we walked, we denounced,
it did not change anything
We dreamed, we hoped, we were optimistic,
but nothing has change

Where is humanity? I am tired.
Oh my God I am tired...

So we will fight.
Until now we had no weapons
but time is running and destroying is needed.
Let's find who builds it,
and those who likes it.
Let's mute the ones who sleep in opulence
cause they are against the poorest.
And soon you will have no choice than to listen to them.
Not afraid but determinate,
choose your side, the 3rd world war will not be decided
by the highest authority.
And we believe in victory.
Use you art, your knowledges,
your ignorance,
you will fall like flies
because the fight for freedom is stronger
than the hope you have to keep it.
Hide in addictions, overfly your body,
think you find answers,
reality is other.

Sleep tight my friends,
you will be woken up sooner or later,
by the oppressor
or by your murderer..

[Evan]

Sounds nice, can't wait to hear it on the radio. I read carefully your song, and must say there are a few issues that should be fixed:

That's why everything is fucked.

I personally feel fucked up would be more appropriate in this particular case, but I'm not sure.

i feel like i reach no wander.

Don't forget to capitalize your "I"s.

but nothing has change

Here you should rather use the past tense : "changed".

Where is the humanity? I am tired.

"Where is humanity? I am tired" works better without the "the".

Oh my god i am tired...

God with a capital [G] and same thing for the "I".

Let's find who build it,

Here, you can either use the present tense "builds it" or the past tense "built it" but the base form here is incorrect.

and those who like it.
Let's mute the ones who sleep in opulence
cause it is against the poorest

Something does not match right here: you refer to "it" after talking of the "ones" before coming back to "it". You should either use "cause they are against the poorest" or change the phrasing, because it makes little sense otherwise.

choose your side, the 3rd world war will not be decide

You should use the past tense here again : "decided".

Use you art, your knowledges,

"Use your art, your knowledge", with an [r] and no [s].

you will be woke up sooner or later,

This an irregular verb: "woken".

Wow, that was long, but I hope you can reread your song and correct your mistakes

[Lilian N]

Thanks

Sure i will change all the mistakes i did.

Glad someone enjoyed it