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Titre: Bad feelings
Posté par: Aiden-9 le 13 septembre 2019 à 18:36:11
Feeling lonely. Just wanted someone to listen to me. I won’t hurt anybody. I promise.
It’s just that I don’t know if I can hold it in me any longer.
I hate to make it all about me. I’m sincere about what I’m saying, and what I’m saying is: stop pretend to know me, stop judging me, instead come talk to me, keep me company. I need to feel real, less empty.
These times, I cry. I also want to scream and fight, but I don’t have the energy to start hating myself. I prefer to hate the word instead.
If you are reading this, it’s too late. I did not escape but for sure need help. Don’t get it wrong, I’m not a victim, I’m realist. Realism makes me guilty.
"The thing" is here, surrounding me. I’m sweating, it’s oppressing me. Can’t sleep, my brain tortures me. Someone’s calling, unable to speak. I can’t breathe, "the thing" is killing me.

It says "game over".      The winner?   

Titre: Re : Bad feelings
Posté par: derrierelemiroir le 16 septembre 2019 à 14:42:16
Salut Aiden-9

Je ne sais pas trop quel genre de commentaire tu attends, je vais commencer par l'anglais du coup:

stop pretend to know me

These times, I cry
Je ne comprends pas à quoi ça se réfère "these times"

I prefer to hate the word instead.
the word ou the world?

Don’t get it wrong,
don't get me wrong?

I’m realist
I'm a realist?

Sinon en général, c'est court mais j'ai bien aimé. Le rythme et les sonorités me plaisent, la fin aussi :)
Titre: Re : Bad feelings
Posté par: Jonque le 15 novembre 2019 à 09:48:59
Bonjour :)

"I prefer hating the world"
Non ?

Très joli texte sinon